Thursday, June 08, 2006

Time Brakes

(for no one)

Sticker on the bumper
Passing opportunity
Knocks me over

Days of silence
Will return
On the way back

Thinking of you
Wish you were here
Ciao for now

8 comments:

Kai said...

thank u....i like ur poem..

Neetee said...

Provocative.
Stylistic and smart.
An instant re-read.

Pat Paulk said...

No it just wrinkles us up and throws us away. Good poem Steve!!

steve said...

kai - thank you - you look great in your formal dance picture!

jon - thank you for the strongly positive comment!

queen neetee - thank you for these words, it means a lot to hear them from you.

pat - something very unavoidable about the whole thing...I guess we get some choices on how to respond - writing about it seems like a reasonable one!

aurora - thank you - it is really good to have you back.

floots said...

nice one
like the title
and
the way in which the
bracketed words
somehow make the ending
all the more poignant

S.L. Corsua said...

Reminds me of lingering what-ifs. ^_^ The second stanza makes me ponder with a sense of calm.

Thank you. ^_^

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

really nice!

steve said...

floots - thank you - was away on vacation several days - hence the postcard lines.

soulless - got a good supply of what-ifs - glad you found your way here.:)

andrew - thanks!